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Cake day: August 1st, 2023

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  • On the positive side: I really enjoyed how it switched at the end between the third person (that gave a feeling of impartiality) to a first person, basically admitting bias along the text.

    On the critical side: to make it a bit relatable,the reader needs to understand why you would ride a behemoth, and here most of the writing is about the negatives, so it’s hard to take the warning seriously. The reader is brought to think “Nobody would be that stupid! We will just handle it better” - a slightly more nuanced approach would make it more insidious and believable as a threat I think. In particular the final with the crazied king is over the top…

    Overall: well build, good rhythm and nice idea. I ho sempre enjoyed the read! Thanks!















  • My little piece of advice: you don’t have to think about the future, tomorrow, next week, they are all far off. Think about now, this hour, the next 5 minutes, or whatever stretch of time seems manageable. What do you do now? Cook dinner? Watch a show? Cry in the shower? The future might be scary and too much to manage now. You’ll handle it when you get to it. Now, you only have to think about right now.

    Verbena tea is calming and soothing. Lavender is relaxing. Green tea for me is a calming ritual.

    You got this. Maybe it doesn’t feel like it, but you only need to do one step, and you got that one step.